Today I have done my second edit to my Narrative
writing. I have not really expanded on my writing but I
have upgraded my problem in my piece of writing.
Ghost in the lake.
One sunny morning I was awoken from the glimmer of sunlight in my room.
I then went to brush my teeth, while doing so I think my eyes were playing tricks
on me but I saw an old looking ship. I thought nothing of it because this lake
has a lot of fish. So once I finished brushing my teeth I went to eat breakfast.
Again I saw the same ship but slightly closer. That was enough to make me stay at
my neighbor's house for the day.While was watching this horror movie called the invisible
man.
I then went to brush my teeth, while doing so I think my eyes were playing tricks
on me but I saw an old looking ship. I thought nothing of it because this lake
has a lot of fish. So once I finished brushing my teeth I went to eat breakfast.
Again I saw the same ship but slightly closer. That was enough to make me stay at
my neighbor's house for the day.While was watching this horror movie called the invisible
man.
Hi Amihuti you did very good on Narrative writing and keep the good work up.
ReplyDeleteHi Amihuti I think your story is great, I also like how you used glimmer in your writing, there unique
ReplyDeleteHI Amihuti I really like your story and how you gave a little brief description on what you re doing and remember Invisible Man is a name of a movie so capital letters.
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